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So, who wants to see the fixed version of the text, now that I got into Mirian’s brain a bit better? WARNING: This has not been run through CC yet, so it is uncritiqued, and may be filled with epic suckage!
So, now that you’ve seen the crap version of Chapter 5 opening. I should have mentioned that chapter 4 is where she meets Jerok after fleeing from a gang of murderous robbers. She has accepted Jerok’s offer to accompany her to Trior. What she doesn’t know is that Jerok is a thief of sorts as well. After originally planning on robbing her, when he found out she was a priestess traveling to the castle, he decided to tag along so he could swipe some goodies from there.
OK, so lets look at the interview. For purposes of this portion, M: is Mirian, and J: is me.
Objective: Travelling, Mirian is reflective of the attack, wondering how she could have done more. She tells Jerok about it, and he tries to be comforting to her.
J: So, Mirian. You’ve met Jerok, what do you think?
M: He is definitely a charmer. He’s not telling me everything, but I still trust him.
M: He could have robbed or killed me anytime he wanted. Or worse. But he didn’t. He shared his food with me and protected me while I slept.
J: Why do you think he is doing that?
M: I am not sure, but am I really in a position to question it? The fact is that if he does attack me, I would be helpless to stop him on my own. I have to trust that Aliyah will protect me.
J: Fair enough. Are you going to tell him what happened?
M: I guess I should. I am so ashamed of it. I could have at least saved Frederick. But if I had healed him, would he have ran with me, or gone back to get killed again? Augh! It doesn’t matter. I am a healer, and I failed. I was afraid! Can’t you just leave it alone? You’re making me cry again…
J: Sorry. -hug- You’ll get through it, I promise. It’s time to wake up now. You need to get going.
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There you go. Like I said, I have some longer ones, but this one is most directly reflected in the fixed portion of the story. You’ll see that in a few days!
No, I’m not talking to myself. My characters are talking to me, and I talk back. Really, it’s them. Don’t you hear them? I do…..
At long last, I am back to finish the editing series. I had to dig down into my stack of discard paper to get chapter 1 notes again, but let’s wrap this up, as I already know what I want to talk about next.
Hello, little blog. I have been ignoring you, and for that, I am sorry. I promise to make it up to you with a great big post to wrap up the editing series this week.